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Craig Zimmerman's Essay

   The thesis statement for this essay appears to be about six sentences long. The first sentence introduces what the remainder of the essay will be about and each of the other five sentences talk about what each section of the essay will discuss. The subtitles of this essay are directly relevant to the thesis statement since the thesis explained what each section will be about.

   These subtitles are arranged in a logical order with introductions and backstory starting in the beginning. The next sections are about what he has to do in the present to accomplish his goals. The final sections discuss what his future goals and aspirations are and how his major will help him. The sections are primaly told without using personal examples which is understandable as the author is a Freshman at MSU. Instead the author uses information cited from various sources such as books and interviews to present all information which may convince someone to select a major in Management. These sources all seem to be quoted in the correct format according to MLA.

   Though the conclusion is short, it is able to wrap up the essay effectively. It summarizes the author's interest in business and management and explains why he wanted to select this major at MSU. This essay is definetly audienc friendly. It not only explains why students should choosing Management in layman's terms, but it also presents them in a logical and clear fashion.

Yifan Zhao's Essay

What is the thesis statment: The thesis statment in this essay is about four sentences long and is presented in the form of questions which will later be answered later in the essay. Like the first essay, the first sentence of the thesis explains what the essay will be about before showing what the rest of the essay will be about. The subtitles are arranged in chronological order with the first section explaining what his major is and the subsequent sections talking about what you have to do to achieve that major and how it will help you in your future. The subtitles are very relevant to the thesis.

   The subtitles are arranged staring with an introduction and background which then transition to courses required for the course and how writing courses relate with Hospitality Business. The author then goes on to explain how Hospitality Business majors can affect society and which jobs are available to Hospitality Business majors. Like the first essay, the evidence in the sections is primarily given through information found in ariticles and books. This is probably because the author, like the first author, was a Freshman at MSU without much experience in the field. The sources used appear to be correctly cited in the "works cited" section and are referenced many times throughout the essay.

   Also like the first essay, the conclusion is somewhat brief. It still summarizes the thesis effectively though. It also quickly summarizes the major points in the essay. This essay is very audience friendly. The author uses simple terms which an incoming Freshman would be able to understand and also throuroughly explains the requirements to complete this major.